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Post by whatishappening on Feb 15, 2016 19:46:18 GMT -5
So, basically a random lion fanfic. -cough- Hope you enjoy~
Prologue
He is a savage. Known throughout the lands, this king had quite the reputation.
He is heartless. He is know to "adopt" worthless cubs and slaughter them.
He is a King.
But he is not a cruel king.
He is only a savage to protect his pride.
He only kills cubs to put them out of their misery.
He has a story that not many listen to.
But now, his silent tale will awaken...
Should I continue? Give me some constructive criticism, Thanks!
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Hawk
New Warrior
wow i havent been active in almost three years
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Post by Hawk on Feb 15, 2016 19:51:36 GMT -5
Well I guess I can try a review?
It seems more like a poem or a 'summary' instead of a prolouge. I would like to hear the story, and I may check back in here from time to time. I like how you gave both the kings motives and what the others (?) think of his motives.
Hm. Continue!
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