Post by тнє αятιѕт on Jun 17, 2015 23:51:33 GMT -5
Name: Aspenstorm Gender: Tom Physical Description: Black tom with gray and white dappled patches Skills/Traits/Personality: Grumpy and arrogant, yet can be the sweetest cat if you find his weakness. Very good at hunting and fighting. History: Born as a rogue-kit, Aspen was born in a litter along with his brother, Scratch, who was born about five minutes before him. In another litter, his younger sister, Cinder, was born. From another father, he had another two siblings- Rose, the youngest of them, and Snow, the eldest. One night, eight moons after Aspen's birth, their mother, Sonya, was in a heated argument with Snow, resulting in her death. Aspen had witnessed the death and Snow leaped at him to kill him, but the commotion of Sonya's death had awoken Scratch and he knocked away Snow, who was caught off-guard, and took a quick bite to snap his neck, instantly killing him. Aspen was then always thankful to Scratch. With no cat to care for them, for their fathers had abandoned their kits, they began to seek for refuge, Aspen acting as the leader figure. A patrol of Clan warriors found them and took them to their Clan, WindClan. There, their leader, Smallstar, had given Scratch and Aspen their apprentice names, then being Aspenpaw and Scratchpaw. Their sisters stayed as kits as they were too young to train, earning the names Rosekit and Cinderkit. They were cared for by the current queens there; a pregnant she-cat names Reedfoot and a nursing queen named Blizzardstorm, whose only kit was too young to interact. Aspenpaw's mentor was a swift easy-going brown tabby tom named Runningcloud while Scratchpaw's was a long-furred gray tom with a nose smaller than average, thus his name Littlenose. Aspenpaw soon grew a soft spot for Runningcloud's daughter, Leopardpaw, a golden tabby she-cat with dark golden spots. Aspenpaw soon grew closer to her and suddenly found out she was having his kits. Afraid of what their clan would think of having kits at a young age, when they were born, they gave them up. With help from the medicine cat, who knew all along, they gave the kits to Reedfoot, as she was the only nursing queen in the nursery. Blizzardstorm's kit, Sagekit-or Sagepaw- was out of the nursery along with Cinderpaw and Rosepaw. Reedfoot was a bit suspicious, but Applenose, the medicine cat, assured her they were found on the border, abandoned by their mother. When the kits were old enough to see and talk, Aspenpaw and Leopardpaw were warriors, taking on the names of Aspenstorm and Leopardcloud. The kits, two toms and a she-kit, were suspicious themselves when they realized none of them looked like Reedfoot or, her mate, Dustwing. The biggest tom, Larkkit, decided to ask Reedfoot who was their real mother, but it only resulted in a lick on the ear and a reasurring statement how she was. Ever since, the kits had never known their true parents. Other: Nope!
Last Edit: Jun 17, 2015 23:58:24 GMT -5 by тнє αятιѕт
Honeyheart. Honey is fine, I don't see any problems there. All -heart cats are outspoken and self-confident. They don't have a big ability to compromise. They're mostly nosy, a lot. Now a -heart cat can be understanding also, and they're not always curious. Don't see too many problems, it's just that I don't see a lot of these characteristics in her skills, etc.
Physical Description:
This is fine. I like the body type, and "shorthaired" is very good... Don't see anything wrong!
Skills/Personality:
Her only skill is that she isn't very good at fighting. What about hunting? Might want to include that, too. Her personality I also described in the "Name" part; don't see anything horrible! Although, might want to include just a bit more.
Other: I'm so sorry if this doesn't make sense or something is wrong. I wanted to get back to you as soon as possible.
Aspenstorm. Okay, so a dappled cat? Aspen- is for a grey cat, but I can see why (the dapples). I think Loon- would be a better prefix for Aspenstorm. -storm.. Um the only thing I know about him is that he's grumpy and arrogant. I see why that is a -storm, but I really do need more. Since -storm cats DO have "up, happy" points, then I don't think he would be the sweetest, though. Hunting and fighting are both decent, although a lot of -storm cats are impatient, so hunting might not come as easy to him. You should probably change the suffix if you would want to; I suggest -claw. LOONCLAW!
Physical Description:
I only know his pelt color. I would really need his eye color, that's extremely helpful. Also, I would want something else, such as white markings, or anything else.
Skills/Personality:
I don't know much, literally two sentences about his skills and personality. Please try to include more, it would really help me with his review. I don't see many problems, however I explained some things about -storm in the "Name" part of this review.
Other:
The history is extensive, which is pretty cool. Might want to change the length of the history to the length of the skills and personality as that would help me a ton! Also, super sorry if something didn't make sense because I've been having a few tough moments. Wanted to get back to you ASAP.
railfur , I don't have time to do all 3 so I will do those later. Sorry! beech, Thank you! I got inspired by Rook and Gingernose's threads, so never be afraid to make your own!
"Sometimes I dream about being in the forest, hunting with Brackenpaw, then I wake up and the pain in my leg reminds me that I'll never hunt again. It feels too much to bear. I have to pretend that maybe, one day, I'll be able to hunt again." -Cinderpelt
I might make my own page, but I wouldn't know what to put on the front part!
Post by 🎄Vegan the Festive Goat🎄 on Jun 21, 2015 3:15:30 GMT -5
Name* Lavenderstream (pretty lyrical I know XD!) Gender Female Physical Description A slightly lager then average pale gray cat with green eyes, has a thick short haired pelt and large hind legs with a slightly short tail. Skills/Traits/Personality A relaxed cat that loves to wade and can resist force fairly well, when swimming she can swim through tough currents with ease by swiftly diving forward powerfully. History* N\A Other* I tired to describe the cats skills better this time
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Name: Lavender- and -stream are both traditional, however names aren't picked if they sound pretty; prefix is looks and suffix is skill. You picked both of these fine, since Lavender- is a pale grey cat, or it's possible. It seems that you copied Lavender word for word almost, like a perfect cat to match the name. I'll continue with -stream. Most cats aren't in love with water, and you mentioned that Lavenderstream is relaxed. Cats would have to be brave to in the first place even GO in water, so you can change that if you would like. Everything here is about swimming, however I'll get to other things in the rest of the sections.
Physical Description: Fine, however -stream cats tend to be slender, and by "larger than average" do you mean weight-wise or height-wise? Just wondering. Most of your description seems to be spot-on, just try not to copy from a resource such as Ailuronymy. Add some creativeness into it!
Skills/Personality: All I see is that she's good at swimming, really. What about hunting? What about fighting? History? I don't see much about Lavenderstream, you should really try to include more in this section. Good description about her swimming, so I would keep that. Just remember to add more!
Other: That's it. Lavenderstream is fine, I just think you might want to add more.
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Post by 🎄Vegan the Festive Goat🎄 on Jul 1, 2015 17:09:00 GMT -5
Name* Grizzlyfoot Gender Male Physical Description A mid shade brown cat with green eyes. Pelt is thick, ragged. Build is small and lean. Tail is shortish and claws are small. Ears are small and paws are large. Legs are long. Skills/Traits/Personality A nervous tom that likes to rush things. Skills: Fighting, Bad, rushing things makes him unable to dodge and jump right in, small claws makes his blows weak. Hunting, Normal, His rushing things makes it hard to sneak up on prey but his quick feet help make up for it. Running, Great, his long legs and big paws makes it easy to run and his nervousness means he gets a lot of practice! Climbing, Fairly bad, his big paws makes it hard to grasp wood sometimes and his small claws are weak. Tracking, Fairly good, His nervousness can make him lose focus sometimes but he has a nose for scents! XD Herbs, Fail, he knows nothing of herbs. Kits, Fairly bad, he smothers them because of his nervousness. History* N/A Other* This time I made my own name instead of using the blog!
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Cat's name: Ternwhisker Gender: She-cat Description: White furred with grey tabby patches on her head/ears, shoulders/back and tail. Has a thin, lanky build and blue eyes. Personality, skills: A friendly and compassionate cat with a strong belief in her ancestors. Is a good listener and very patient with her clan-mates. Is specifically intuitive and rarely makes bad choices. Started as a warrior but made her way into her medicine-cat position. Had an apprentice as a warrior and currently has one as a medicine cat. She is very skilled in hunting but has a good knowledge of her herbs in her position. History (optional!): Nothing very interesting. Grew up and fit in nicely with her clan, but was particularly focused on hunting, which made out good for her herb-finding skill. Anything else?: nah
Flamewhisker is a fluffy creamy-ish orange maincoon, with darker cream-orange stripes. She has a white-creamy tailtip, paws, chest, and belly, with slightly unseeable spots. Flamewhisker has bright olive-green eyes. Her fur is smooth, but it gets dirty from the mess she gets in. Flamewhisker's white paws are creamy looking when it fades in slightly, but they are kinda likes socks that twolegs put on their feet. Her pad color is light pink, so is her nose. In Flamewhisker's pads are white fluffy tuft-like fur sticking up in between her pad.
Skills/Traits/Personality:
Flamewhisker can be sassy at times, but most of the time she is helpful, and friendly. She acts like she was a kittypet when you get on her nerves, but she is friendly most of the time. Flamewhisker acts like an elder when she's annoyed, and tired along with acting like a kittypet. She aims on being a very nice she-cat, but she sometimes ignores the goal, or forgets about it. Flamewhisker has a short-ish high temper, but she tries her best to control her temper. She may be thought as a mean cat, but you just don't know her really well to know she's actually friendly, but has some bad sides. Flamewhisker is soft to younger cats, but can be stern if it's needed. She is also very outgoing with other cats, but not too much. Flamewhisker is sometimes airy, but not always.
Flamewhisker is an excellent hunter, but ok at fighting.
History: Flamewhisker was a very curious kit when she was very young. She was SO annoying to everyone. Flamewhisker's sister died when she was an apprentice, which made her very unhappy for a while. Her only sister that's alive left the clan to be a loner for some odd reason. As Flamewhisker grew into a very interesting cat in the clan, her mentor found how how great she was good at hunting, soon she became a warrior. When she became a warrior, many things happened, such as her finding her only sister on a patrol, they chased her out of the territory. Even though Flamewhisker never saw her parents ever again, she is still her happy self.
Lets go back to when she was a kit. Her sister's names were Gingerkit, and Amberkit. Flamewhisker was the oldest of the litter. She doesn't know her father, because he was a kittypet. When Flamewhisker became an apprentice, her mentor was Whiteclaw. One day, she found a loner stealing some land prey from the territory she, and her mentor had to chase it out as best as they can, but soon it became a fight. Gingerpaw was with her then, because at that time there weren't many warriors. The loner almost killed Gingerpaw, but atleast Flamewhisker(Flamepaw) was able to rush back with her little sister. She hurried back, but it was too late. Gingerpaw died from blood loss. Flamewhisker was very upset, but soon she recovered.
Moons after that, she became a warrior. She forgot about Gingerpaw's death, and continued her clan life in Riverclan. Amberpaw left the clan after Flamewhisker became a warrior, and her. Flamewhisker only saw her once in a border patrol, and had to chase her out, but she didn't know it was her.... Soon, she relized it was her. Flamewhisker went out to look for her again, but she got in trouble for going out alone, but during the sneaking out she was attacked by the same loner, but she managed to hurry back to camp.
Post by ✖ʍousestar✖ on Sept 6, 2015 3:18:28 GMT -5
Name: Honeyleaf
Gender: Female
Physical Description: Honeyleaf is a fairly stocky she-cat, she had short legs and a very long tail. She has fairly long fur and it is described as being sticky and slightly greasy. She is a white she with a pale ginger back, and 'hood'like marking on her head, and her tail is a full pale ginger, She has white stockings on her two fore-legs and her back legs are almost fully ginger. She has large round, lime-yellow eyes, described as the colour of honey.
Skills/Traits/Personality: Honeyleaf has a vast nowladge of herbs and healing methods. She is a modest and kind she, working well under pressure, she can also muli-task suprisingly well. When you first meet this she, she is quiet and modest, kind and helpful, although, once you become closer to her, she becomes far more colourful and playful.
History: Born with two brothers, Honeykit had to fight to get what she wanted. She was raised up to being an apprentice although she was horrible at hunting and fighting, she failed her final exams, and was left mentor-less. She was soon taken in by the medicine cat of the clan at the time, due to the fact that she had gotted a vast knowledge of herbs in her free time, she was given her full name when her mentor died, taking on her suffix, 'leaf.' From then on, she was gievn the title of medicine cat, protecting her clan.
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Name* Dacefoot Gender She-cat Physical Description Dacefoot is a lean, and long legged she-cat. She has silky gray fur, and white paws. Her chest, and belly is silver, with her back have some golden flecks on it, and some darker gray, and black splotches all aroud her. Dacefoot has a black ear and a silver patch around her eye, and a fluffy tail with a black tip, and black stripes. Her eyes are blue that look silver at one angle, and violet at another angle. Dacefoot also has long whiskers and folded ears. Skills/Traits/Personality Dacefoot is a skiddish she-cat, she is caring, yet serious about being a warrior. She is careful when around enemies, or a cat she doesn't trust fully. Dacefoot is great at running, and also is good at hunting cause of her speed. She is nice and caring to younger cats and enjoys helping the leader in anyway possible. Despite her sweetness, she is a bitter enemy to those who she dislikes and would never give mercy to enemies, even if there's a cost for it. Even though she's a great hunter, she isn't that good at fighting, more like an average fighter. History* I don't have a history planned for her quite yet. Other* This is an old character of mine I had since 2013/2012. Her previous name was Sunpool, and I changed everything about her into Dacefoot.