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Post by Bluestar on Dec 31, 2015 20:11:08 GMT -5
Yay! Thanks! : D
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Post by Bluestar on Jan 1, 2016 10:28:57 GMT -5
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Hollyleaf ღ
Holiday Elf
Daijoubu! Yoisho! Ichi-ni! 1 2 3!
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Post by Hollyleaf ღ on Jan 2, 2016 15:50:55 GMT -5
I like the 3rd chapter very much! The description is especially well done. I wonder why it all seems familiar to the kits? x3
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Post by Bluestar on Jan 2, 2016 20:50:43 GMT -5
x3 Thanks! I'm making chapter 4 now actually, thanks for the feedback!
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Post by Bluestar on Jan 2, 2016 21:06:01 GMT -5
Sorry for double-post... oenomaus wanna read?
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Post by Bluestar on Jan 3, 2016 20:16:48 GMT -5
Sorry for triple-post... I WILL STOPZ))
CHAPTER 4 IS OUT FINALLY!!
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Hollyleaf ღ
Holiday Elf
Daijoubu! Yoisho! Ichi-ni! 1 2 3!
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Post by Hollyleaf ღ on Jan 4, 2016 17:09:49 GMT -5
Hmmm; Water shall find kin? I wonder what this means o:
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Post by Bluestar on Jan 4, 2016 19:26:01 GMT -5
who knows? :3
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Post by ♪♫•*Crescent-o♪♫•* on Jan 4, 2016 22:04:31 GMT -5
I think this would be better if you used a variety of words and put more detail into it. It sseems to move too fast. The plot is really good though. Maybe if you expressed a bit more on each cat's personality?
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Post by Bluestar on Jan 5, 2016 7:51:02 GMT -5
That's a good idea, I'll try more of that in chapter 5
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Post by ♪♫•*Crescent-o♪♫•* on Jan 5, 2016 20:37:06 GMT -5
Okay, I still really like it though
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Post by Bluestar on Jan 6, 2016 7:40:11 GMT -5
thanks!
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Post by Bluestar on Jan 13, 2016 23:41:11 GMT -5
CHAPTER 5 UP!!! YAY!
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Hollyleaf ღ
Holiday Elf
Daijoubu! Yoisho! Ichi-ni! 1 2 3!
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Post by Hollyleaf ღ on Jan 14, 2016 17:37:13 GMT -5
Awesome! Just one question, who is Applefur? Also I love it so far. Eager to see what happens next.
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Post by Bluestar on Jan 14, 2016 19:41:54 GMT -5
Oh, Applefur is another queen, she is in the allegiances. There will be more of her in chapter 6. Hope that answers ur question! Thanks for the feedback, and supporting this fan fiction, it truly means a lot!
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