Post by Shadowrunner on Feb 25, 2021 7:30:26 GMT -5
Chapter *scrolls up to check what the last chapter number was* 9 I can’t believe it’s been ten moons already Eaglepaw thought as she walked up a hill toward her usual meeting place. When she was still a kit her mother had mysteriously died, no visual injuries and no signs of struggle, she just died. Eaglepaw had been too young to remember her mother, but Sparrowfur told her all about her mother for so long after she died. Sparrowfur would have struggled to feed Eaglefalls kits as well as her own, but luckily her own kits had grown old enough to eat fresh kill by then. So Sparrowfur took care of Eaglepaw and her kin until they were old enough. Despite not remembering her mother, or what exactly happened when her mother died, one memory was burned into her mind for as long as she could remember. The night that her mother died, a strange cat had come and taken them away, saying if the family came with him, they’d have lots of fun. She now knew this cat had been a Windclan cat named Darky. He had taken Eaglepaw and her kin away from camp, “We’re going on an adventure” he had said, and when they got to their destination he explained why he brought them. “I can make you stronger” he had meowed ominously, “Stronger than any of your clanmates, if you’ll let me train you”. “But we’re only kits! We aren’t allowed to train yet, we shouldn’t even be out of camp, especially not with you! You’re from Windclan and we’re Stormclan kits!” Eaglepaw’s sister Daisykit had said. At the time Eaglepaw had been named Eaglekit, but now moons had passed. Eaglepaw had gone with her brother Thrushpaw and her sister Daisypaw to go meet Darky many times, to train in secret and be stronger. Eaglepaws only concern was being strong enough to defend her clan, she had never asked Darky why he trained them, all she needed to know was she was getting stronger. Finally she reached the usual meeting spot and she sat, waiting for her kin and for Darky to arrive. Suddenly her ears pricked up, she heard something. She shook her head, thinking she imagined it. But then she heard it again, and she whipped around. She leaped at the noise, claws sheathed, to find her brother Thrushpaw under her paws. Eaglepaw purred with amusement as she got off her brother, “you aren’t very good at sneaking around” she said. He growled playfully “well maybe if there weren’t so many leaves everywhere, I’m used to hunting on the moor, or in the clearings near the river, not underneath a big fat tree that drops leaves everywhere” he shook his head as a leaf fell on his head, proving his point. Soon Daisypaw arrived, and as the three apprentices practiced their moves, Darky eventually arrived. “I see you all are practicing” he purred with amusement as he walked over. Eaglepaw sat down alongside her siblings to face the Windclan warrior. Darky sat too, and draped his tail over his front paws, “I have a question for you three” he said, pausing to sweep his gaze across them, “do you want to be the strongest in your clan?” Thrushpaw was the one to reply “yes”, “do you want to help your clan thrive?” Daisypaw replied next, “yes”, “do you want to help your clan in any way you can?” Darky said, his gaze resting on Eaglepaw. “Yes” she replied. Darky nodded with approval “do you want to know how you can do that?” he purred. The three apprentices nodded, and he spoke again. “Then you must take on three important roles, one of you must become the medicine cat”- his gaze rested on Daisypaw, who was the most skilled at herbs out of the three -“one of you must become the deputy”- his gaze now stopped of Thrushpaw, who was able to organize the three of them whenever they had a group battle training against Darky –“and one of you”- his gaze finally rested of Eaglepaw, something sparkled in his eyes, Pride? Ambition? Eaglepaw couldn’t tell what it was she saw, -“must become clan leader” he said finally, to Eaglepaw, who all three of the apprentices agreed was the leader of the trio. Eaglepaw stood, her fur fluffed up to twice her size “But we can’t do that! Me being clan leader and Thrushpaw being deputy would mean Feathertail and Lunastar dying!” she yowled. Darky nodded “I’m aware, but if you want your clan to be the best it can be you must do it!” his eyes shined with ambition. Eaglepaw shook her head “I won’t do it! I won’t let Lunastar die just so I can be leader! She does just fine leading the clan, if anything I’d do worse at it!” she hissed. She glanced at her kin hoping to see them agreeing with her but was horrified at what she saw. Thrushpaw wasn’t noticing what was happening, his eyes simply shined with ambition, meanwhile Daisypaw looked hopeful, like she wanted to be a medicine cat now, not aware of the fact that Crowwing would have to die for her to be Crystalpool’s apprentice. She whipped around, and hissed. “What are you two thinking! So many cats will die for you to be a medicine cat and deputy! Feathertail would have to die and then anybody else chosen to be deputy instead of you! And Daisypaw, Crowwing would have to die for you to be a medicine cat apprentice!” she yowled at her kin, barely recognizing them because of the ambitious look on both of their faces. Eaglepaw spun around to run only to feel a weight land on she shoulders. The voice of Darky hissed into her ears “leave me now and I will find and hunt all your kin” he hissed, making Eaglepaw bristle. As the weight let up Eaglepaw stood, and nodded. Not looking at Thrushpaw and Dasiypaw, she growled. “Fine, I’ll do it, just leave my family alone” Eaglepaw hissed, and leapt at Darky to give him something to remember her by. She clawed at his face, leaving a wound deep enough to leave a scar under his eye. She turned, and headed back to camp. There was no more training left to do, so why should she stay? (sorry I haven't updated much lately, but to make up for it the chapter is a bit long I think XDD)
Post by Strikeclaw the Avenger on Mar 5, 2021 12:17:07 GMT -5
Your doing really good! But is Darky Tune's brother? Did Darky killed her mother and how did he do it? Has Darky had training from the Dark Forest?
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Post by Shadowrunner on Mar 6, 2021 12:41:17 GMT -5
Im saying the dark forest isnt involved with this story (for now?) Darky is not Tune's brother (..... idk u saying that makes me think it could be a fun idea) and Darky did not kill Eaglefall, Eaglefall died of a heart attack in the middle of the night (I actually googled it, cats can have heart attacks XD)
Post by Shadowrunner on Mar 6, 2021 16:18:24 GMT -5
Chapter 10 Lunastar looked over her camp as she crawled out of her den, it was shaping up well. The apprentices ran back and forth getting moss and prey for the elders, the hunting patrol was leaving, everything was peaceful. She noticed Eaglepaw, Thrushpaw and Daisypaw entering camp. What could they have been out doing? Lunastar thought, and padded toward them. “So, what were you three doing out of the camp without a warrior?” she mewed curiously. The three apprentices glanced at each other, trying to find the words they needed. “We..” Daisypaw began, Thrushpaw finished her sentence for her, “were hunting!” he mewed. Lunastar tilted her head, “so… where’s your fresh-kill?”, Eaglepaw spoke now, “Um.. we didn’t catch any… we got a bit distracted and ended up playing around….” She mewed, looking down at her paws guiltily. Lunastar nodded, they were only apprentices, she couldn’t scold them for being carefree, They’re still young, let them act like it. “Ok, but next time try to at least catch a mouse, it’s almost Leaf-fall, we need to stock up on prey before leaf-bare begins” and she padded away. Lunastar decided she would go for a walk, I need to stretch my legs anyways, maybe I can catch some fresh-kill too the tabby thought as she padded out of camp. The moon was now high in the sky, soon there would be a full-moon and with the full-moon came the gathering. Lunastar nodded to Thrushtail, who was guarding the camp currently, “I’m going for a walk, keep the camp safe while I do” she mewed, and walked away. Soon, Lunastar arrived in a small clearing with a few flowers. She sat down to rest and closed her eyes, listening to the sounds of the wind blowing and the prey going to its nests to sleep. She almost began to nod off to sleep on accident when a voice hit her ears. “Why hello, Lunastar” the voice said cooly. Her eyes shot open as she sprang up and whirled around to find the cat speaking. She saw a familiar cat, and her pelt bristled. “Darky” she hissed, “what are you doing here” Lunastar spoke with rage edging her mew, Darky had already invaded her territory previously many times, and now he dared face her directly, on her territory! Darky shook his head, eerily calm, “oh no, I’m not here to fight… I’m just here to give you a message” he meowed smoothly, “I would just like to say, you should keep an eye on who your apprentices spend their time with” he said, cruel amusement glinting in his eyes. “And also…” he paused, and gazed at Lunastar for a moment, before leaping at the she-cat. He landed on her shoulders and held his muzzle next to her ear, “You should be careful about who you talk to” he hissed in her ear, and then bit down on her neck, taking a life from the leader of stormclan.
Post by Strikeclaw the Avenger on Mar 10, 2021 11:52:45 GMT -5
AHHHHH! Will Lunastar know which apprentice he was talking about? What will she do when she finds out? CONTINUE PLZ!! Also, if Lunastar exiles them or dies, will you make a new fan fiction?
Eaglepaw's Doudt... Thrushpaw's Sentence... Daisypaw's Exile... Dark Troubles... Just a few ideas for titles.
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Post by Shadowrunner on Mar 10, 2021 12:25:00 GMT -5
ooo sounds fun but lunastar wont exile them ;3 (.... ok maybe one of them will be i havent exactly planned this out ahead of time XD) this is gonna be going for a looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooong time XD but maybe once she dies or i feel like her own "story" is done that I'll move on, I like the name ideas too :3 I'll consider using some of them XD except by the time they get there own stories they will prob have warrior names, except maybe one idk XD THANK U FOR GIVING ME SO MANY FRIGGIN IDEAS STRIKE XDD
Post by Strikeclaw the Avenger on Mar 11, 2021 11:12:06 GMT -5
Here are ideas for punishments (if nessasary.) You can change the duration of the punishments:
Cleaning the elders for a moon More hunting patrols Exile Moving them down a rank for a moon (if they are apprentice, they become kit) Grounded to the camp Sent to ShadowClan (they like Darky so much, they can spend more time with him and take his clan) Must be with a different apprentice for a long time (if Eaglepaw goes outside, she must go with Rockpaw or a warrior, not one of her siblings) Clean out the fresh-kill pile (pick out the crowfood) No warrior training for a moon
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Post by Strikeclaw the Avenger on Mar 11, 2021 18:01:12 GMT -5
Sorry
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Post by Shadowrunner on Apr 8, 2021 13:30:57 GMT -5
sorry for not updating much recently and being kind of dead, I havent felt very motivated and i havent really thought of anything to happen (also i keep forgetting to update XD time goes by too fast) i might try to update soon but idk, i will try to tho
Post by Strikeclaw the Avenger on Apr 28, 2021 12:22:12 GMT -5
Hey Shadowrunner! I have been off for a while, so I will read the new stuff soon. When in doubt, have someone die (preferably someone in the background, so you don't have to elaborate on it. Maybe make a mystery of it?) Or make new secrets, maybe introduce a new character and jot ideas beside them for a twist.
Ex. Pinepelt-Darky's sister, a protagonist, giving WindClan information to StormClan. Dies later when Darky discovers what she is doing. Mentioned a few times, so the readers don't get too attached.
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